Last day in my company. What needs to be added/removed?
Friday will be my last day in my current company. I will have to send an email to everybody working in the company. I have already created the body. Is anything wrong in the sentences? Anything needs to be added or removed? I want to write some different mail.
I don’t want to include name of the persons like senior members, team leader, project manager. I have been working in this company from 2.4 years. I am not happy with company’s attitude about me. I didn’t get a good appraisal. So, I was bored with company and at last got a job in a new company. Anyway, What I have in my mind is written below:
“It is my last day after a wonderful 2+ years with XYZ. I would like to sincerely thank each of you for every experience shared, friendship made, opportunity offered and good times had during this time. I have learned allot from all of you, and will carry what you all have taught me throughout my work life, and will always treasure the memories of being part of this team.
I wish you all the best of luck in the future, and again I thank you for all that you have taught me, all that you have given me, and all that you will always mean to me.
If anyone wants to keep in contact, you can email me on
xyz@gmail.com”
Also I want to add these lines. Will it be OK if I add these? If Yes then how?
When we begin a journey on a Y-shaped path, we feel that great things lie ahead; but, when we come to the split in the path, we feel uncertain, and we ask ourselves which way to go. Eventually, we select one way and move on with it, but at a later point in our journey we may suddenly come to fear that we have made the wrong selection. What if we had chosen the other path? It may have yielded a greater journey! However, it is too late: we must accept that the time for choice is gone, and that we may have failed to choose the right way. ;)..
Sorry for extending length of the details :(
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I don’t see what the point of that last bit is. I’d leave it out. It sounds like a vague reference to being wronged, and it is unnecessary. The other part is just fine. That’s the tone you want. You never know when you want to work with one of these people again.
I agree with @wundayatta, I like the short version. Very well done.
A hint of negativity will not give you any advantage. Leave them with a positive, upbeat impression of you.
Small edits:
“and good times had during this time.” I would just say “and good times.”
“allot” should be “a lot”
“you can email me on” should be “you can email me at”
I agree. The last bit is kind of obscure and a bit weird. The rest is good and I agree with @jaytkay ‘s corrections too.
Please do not send out a generic message to everyone in the company. Just contact those that you’ve made friends with and might want to stay in touch to let them know how to contact you.
I’d go with one or the other. Either the traditional good bye letter, or that what seems to be some kind of Aesop Fable. Actually, I may just send that last part, with the subject line of “The Why of the Y”. Leave them a little confused, and your ghost being the talk of the water cooler for a few days. Yeah, that’s how I’d do it.
@All: Last line will be omitted. Thanks. :)
Omit the whole last paragraph, beginning with “When we begin a journey on a Y-shaped path…”
The technology field is surprisingly narrow. Any one of your recipients could be employed by a future prospective employer and may remember you when the call goes out: “We have a candidate named ‘lessonenglish’ who used to work at XYZ. Anybody know him?” Don’t leave a poor impression or a weird memory behind.
If the company is small, it’s ok to send to everyone. Otherwise keep it to people you know and groups you’ve worked with, and say “If I’ve missed anyone, please feel free to forward this message.”
Right now sentences like “I would like to sincerely thank each of you for every experience shared, friendship made, opportunity offered and good times” sound not-that-sincere because of their vagueness.
I might add one or two concrete details about something that you sincerely feel is positive / that you have really gained / something that you feel like is worth remembering from this job. Even it is “conversations by the water-cooler” or, “I will always remember the time when we pulled an all-nighter to secure the XYZ project..” or “I will miss being greeting by Jeanne’s [the receptionist’s] big smile the first thing on coming in…” etc. ... some reference to a positive common experience .
In general, my preference is to stay honest. If it wasn’t some “wonderful” 2+ years, I wouldn’t say it is. But if there were truly good elements, then I would name them outright. If the project team is small, I would might send out an email that named a good quality of every team member. I would then send a more informative general e-mail to everyone else in the company, the main purpose being to impart my new email.
Not a bad letter overall. However I think this bit is quite cheesy: I thank you for all that you have taught me, all that you have given me, and all that you will always mean to me.
Enjoy the day and forget all the worst think happen in the company all the best
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