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Here's another song! You like it, right?

Asked by Trucktruck (75points) September 10th, 2016

It’s called “Bring us down”.

It’s been a hard road

And we still have a ways to go

You see how nervous I am

I’m sweating bullets inside

But you hold on to me

And I’m not afraid

THE ROUGH WATER OF LIFE

WILL NOT DROWN OUR LOVE

JUST IGNORE ALL THOSE STARING EYES

BECAUSE THIS LIFE IS OURS

AND NOTHING WILL GET IN OUR WAY

NOTHING WILL BRING US DOWN

Last night you tried to give up

On our love, oh man…

But I reminded you

How everything would be lost

I’m not letting go

And neither should you

THE ROUGH WATER OF LIFE

WILL NOT DROWN OUR LOVE

JUST IGNORE ALL THOSE STARING EYES

BECAUSE THIS LIFE IS OURS

AND NOTHING WILL GET IN OUR WAY

NOTHING WILL BRING US DOWN

If you really want this to end

Just let me know

I might have a few sleepless nights

But I’ll try to move on

Or if you still want me

Never let me go

THE ROUGH WATER OF LIFE

WILL NOT DROWN OUR LOVE

JUST IGNORE ALL THOSE STARING EYES

BECAUSE THIS LIFE IS OURS

AND NOTHING WILL GET IN OUR WAY

NOTHING WILL BRING US DOWN

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3 Answers

zenvelo's avatar

Not much to dance to, the beat is off, melody discordant.

Sneki95's avatar

It’s not really bad, but as @zenvelo stated, the beat is off. Maybe you should pay attention to the rhythm and metrics, it will help you improve the song aesthetically and set the lyrics to the music easier.

By the way, how come you’re not rhyming? It is usually way easier to make a song if it rhymes. Not that blank verse is bad….

ZEPHYRA's avatar

Meh…...you have done better!

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