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Anybody want to critique my story?
Greetings all,
A professional writer, with some success, is trying his hand at fiction and would like to know what people honestly think about it. Do you think I have what it takes? I sincerely appreciate your valuable time and feedback.
If you would like to help me, please check out: http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/chapter.asp?chapter_ID=22083
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