Should Daniel go to the family reunion, or not?

I’m working on a story called The Plane Ticket. It is fiction (like anyone will believe that now that I’ve made that statement). It’s a story about feelings and coping with feelings—or it’s supposed to be. I have a couple of questions.

First I’m wondering if people could point out the unclear and nonsensical portions or any other ways it doesn’t work. Also, you can tell me if it is about what I think it is about, or failing that, what you think it is about.

But second, I have a plotting dilemma. What should be done with the plane ticket? ‘Cause honestly, I have no idea, and the ticket is burning a hole in my pocket—no, just messin’ wid’ ya!.

I’ve never done this before, so I’m sure I’ll make a fool out of myself, especially since I didn’t proof read the story. I’m flinging it out on the wall to see what sticks. Other than that, be as nasty as you want. I think I’ve got a tough skin when it comes to criticism. There aren’t many who are more critical of myself than I am. (Ok, so that’s a backwards plea for you to be easy on me, LOL).

Thanks for your help.